Writing: The young detector

Task description: The young detector is a post that we did for writing, Mrs Moala gave us a picture and told us to you's it to make a story. That's the post that I've done with a partner. The blue below is the paragraphs that has already been done for us. But the black is the one that the students.

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It had been three days since it had gone missing. One minute he had held it in his hand, the next it had vanished. How could it just have disappeared? It had been right in front of his eyes!

He had been warned about what would happen if he lost it. His mission had been to guard the key with his life, ever since they visited him last summer.

Adam had always had a detective’s instinct. They had told him as much. He had been chosen because he had certain skills, and he would need them more than ever now.

Only one clue had seemingly been left, which was sat on the living room table.

Holding the magnifying glass up to his eye, Adam began to investigate

by starting in the library looking everywhere, then Adam’s dad was on the couch near him staring at him suspiciously and thinking if he was still looking for it.. He kept on looking for it because he knew what was gonna happen to him when he lost it.

But up the stairs there was something lurking in the dark, something with yellow or orange eyes. But Adam didn’t notice it because he was really focused on finding the key that was given to him to guard. He used his magnified glass to help him look carefully into the book shelfs corners. His dad kindly asked him the key that he was looking for a while but Adam replied in a sad voice “ no, then he turned around and sighed and left. But he kept on looking underneath the table,the shelves but the last place was the couch that his dad was sitting on, he looked under and he saw the key underneath and he grabbed it. In a happy way Adam jumped up with joy saying” I finally found it” said Adam. Adam’s dad said”that’s great son”, so he said” you will be a great detective when you grow up”. But all of a sudden he forgot all about the person or something that was lurking in the dark up stairs so he just carried on with what he was doing with his father. His father was really impressed by the way he found it and not giving up, cause he has seen the way how Adam tried his best trying to find it so he kept his words saying that he will guard the key for them while the person who gave it to him came back. So this is the end of the story about the young the detectar.